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Fic: Burns Night (drabble) - (bb-vm, PG)

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Sep. 13th, 2003 | 12:19 pm
mood: relaxed

Title: Burns Night
Fandom: LOTR RPS
Pairing: Billy Boyd / Viggo Mortensen
Rating: PG
Feedback: yes please! also constructive criticism of any kind
Disclaimer: not true, I made it up
Archive: yes, go ahead, please let me know
Notes: Seems to be in the same Billy-Viggoverse as Jalapeño, written for the contrelamontre food challenge. Triggered by airgiodslv, thank you darling!
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You always get swamped by the wave you don't see coming.

In the beautiful New Zealand summer, it's bampot to long for the rain on stone streets, the pub, the warm fug of sweat and beer, the mates, the music.

So it's a shock when an arm wraps around your chest, and a throaty voice whispers, "Happy Burns Night," in an accent that's just wrong.

And then you can't stop laughing at the package with the stupid tartan bow. You feel beloved, but it's fucking funny.

It finally comes out in a wheeze that hurts your chest, "I hate haggis."

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AndreaLyn

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from: andrealyn
date: Sep. 13th, 2003 12:26 pm (UTC)
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Eee! I love the throaty and hoarse voice and I simply adore the haggis! Beaut!

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: Sep. 13th, 2003 12:32 pm (UTC)
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*purrs* what a lovely compliment!

It's nice to just finish something for a change. I'm so deep in so many stories, but I'm terrible at endings. So I keep fiddling, but it takes a long time.

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AndreaLyn

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from: andrealyn
date: Sep. 13th, 2003 12:33 pm (UTC)
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The ending is just so right here though, because it feels content and right and did I mention how there's not enough Billy/Viggo? no? There isn't enough Billy/Viggo!

Thank you for writing it!

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from: ex_grievous_115
date: Sep. 13th, 2003 12:30 pm (UTC)
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You feel beloved, but it's fucking funny.

And ain't that what love should be all about!

This was gorgeous.

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: Sep. 13th, 2003 12:34 pm (UTC)
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I have a foolish grin on my face, I'm so pleased you like it. I always worry.

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be patient I am getting to the point

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from: airgiodslv
date: Sep. 13th, 2003 05:19 pm (UTC)
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Wheee!!!

Look, I'm actually reading something! This was marvelous...so simple, and so saturated with culture. The opening line was brilliant, and it didn't jar at all to jump from the metaphor into the story, even considering the drabble-format length. All of the words - bampot, fug, Burns Night, tartan, haggis - are atmospheric and establish the culture so subtly, because we are after all thinking the world through Billy's POV. I love the "accent that's just wrong," because it's such a great and complete thought to have. Sweet and funny and adorable. I'm thrilled to have 'triggered' it, although I honestly can't claim that honor. 'Twas all you, sugar.

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: Sep. 13th, 2003 05:52 pm (UTC)
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You give the best feedback!

The culture thing was mostly from experience. I did do a little research to back up my assumptions and find bampot. But ya'know, it's nice that at least some of the trivia I've accumulated over all this time has come in handy.

You did too trigger it. That conversation in comments around Caliente. Reminded me of Jalapeño and then I made an offhand mention of haggis and you wrote:

Haggis drabble!!

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Totally. Write it! Please?!


So I did.

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be patient I am getting to the point

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from: airgiodslv
date: Sep. 13th, 2003 06:01 pm (UTC)
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Oh, I remember the discussion *g*, I just had nothing to do with the loveliness of the drabble itself. I can take no credit.

...so what does bampot mean, anyway?

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: Sep. 13th, 2003 06:11 pm (UTC)
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According to a Scots Dictionary: A bampot is a colloquial term for a foolish, stupid or crazy person.

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hanarobi

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from: hanarobi
date: Sep. 13th, 2003 10:24 pm (UTC)
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Well, my dear, you did it again. Your stuff is just so subtle and delicate. I swear you do write the most intellectual stuff around. I enjoyed it very much. Thanks for writing it.

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: Sep. 14th, 2003 07:16 am (UTC)
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Thank you sweetheart. Feedback like that is not just gratifying, but surprising. I am an intellectual, ohboy am I. But that my writing is subtle and delicate? That's lovely to learn.

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fajrdrako

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from: fajrdrako
date: Sep. 14th, 2003 06:59 am (UTC)
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Lovely drabble! You make me wish it was Burns Night, and he can give me his haggis, since I love the stuff.

Really, you packed a lot of nuance into a short piece: it's what drabbles ought to be, but often aren't.

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: Sep. 14th, 2003 07:20 am (UTC)
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Thanks! Writing drabbles always surprises me, they're like haikus and force me to be very careful with my words. I owe everything that works in the form to shaenie!

(The last time I had haggis was in 1999 in the restaurant in Edinburgh Castle, with t'husband and t'son, waiting for the one-o'clock gun. I don't think it was a trad recipe, it was nicely peppery and quite tasty.)

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