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Ficlet: "Take Me Down" (ob/dm, NC-17, D/s)

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May. 31st, 2004 | 06:23 pm

Title: Take Me Down
Pairing: Orlando Bloom / Dominic Monaghan
Rating: NC-17
Summary: Orlando wishes he was the kind of bloke who could kneel and worship
Disclaimer: Not true: I made it up
Warnings: D/s, some discussion of S/M
Feedback: Please! And constructive criticism of all kinds.
Archive: Please ask first.
Notes: I wrote this a while ago, experimenting with some of my kinks I haven't seen written much. Thanks to anatsuno for the beta, I switched to pronouns.


"What the fuck do you fucking want, Orli?"

If Orlando knew that, he wouldn't be here, would he. He'd rather not piss Dom off like this. Or maybe he would? So he just shakes his head.

Dom pushes him harder against the wall. Orlando can smell his own want, under the bad American beer and the good Mexican tequila. If he hadn't gotten so tanked, he wouldn't be here now. His legs are rubbery and there's a sinking feeling in his stomach. Dom smells great, like excitement and sex.

Dom scowls at him, eyebrows bristling. His voice is uncompromising, "I've had enough of your fucking teasing. Face the music or tell me to go."

Orlando can't look at Dom. He can't say anything, he feels like his mouth is glued shut. God, he doesn't want Dom to go. He shakes his head and twists away, using his weight to pull free. It always surprises him to realize he's heavier and taller than Dom. But Dom is quicker and less conflicted: he pushes him down on the couch and sits on him.

Orlando struggles until Dom pins his shoulders. If Dom knew what that did to him... Maybe Dom does, maybe he can feel Orlando's body respond under him, maybe that's why he leans close and kisses him. Kisses thoroughly, without holding back, better than ever before. Orlando opens to him, lets him take and take and take anything he wants.

Dom breaks off and his breath sounds like a gale in the quiet room. His forehead is against Orlando's. He waits, hoping, wondering what comes next. Dom's always confused him: sending mixed messages with his leather bracelets and cheerful snogging. Maybe that's why Orlando's been provoking him for so long. Hoping for hands like this, that know how hold him just right.

Dom's voice is rough as he asks, "Is this what you want?"

Orlando's voice is stuck in his mouth.

Dom considers for a moment, and then in a much more tender tone, says, "This is what you need, isn't it."

It takes everything Orlando has to barely nod. Saying it would ruin everything.

"Orli..." Dom trails off, and he swallows hard, afraid. Dom shifts his body and moves his hands to Orlando's face. Just as he's sure it's all going pear-shaped, he feels Dom's elbows pinning his shoulders. He dares to look up to see Dom's face, flushed and intent -- Oh yeah.

Orlando moans, moving a little under Dom's grip.

"Take you down," Dom is growling now, "Hold you down." His voice touches something scary-good inside Orlando. "Take what I want." He can feel Dom's erection poking into his stomach, and his own feels like a rock.

Hands reach his and tuck them under Dom's boney knees. Orlando can't move, can't escape, can only sit there and take it, and that's fucking perfect.

He tries to turn needy whimpers into sexy sighs. Dom seems to like it, he's devouring Orlando's neck, finding the tender places and teasing them with his mouth. By god, Dom's hands are as firm and punishing as he has longed for. Orlando wishes he was the kind of bloke who could kneel and worship, he'd do it for Dom at the speed of light.

Orlando lets Dom move his hands up and behind his head. Dom's wrist cuff suddenly loops around both his wrists, like some magic trick. It's just right, better than right, because it's Dom, and not some berk from a club.

Dom kneels up against Orlando, pushing their bodies together, and Orlando grinds against his legs. Dom's jeans are open and his cock comes out and thrusts into his mouth. Orlando's sucking as deep as he can, but he's no fucking good at this. Dom pulls his hair and grates out, "Just fucking take it, Orli." Oh he wants to, if only he had hands free to touch... but it's so kinky-exciting this way, where he can't do a fucking thing. He tries to take Dom's cock deep, and he gags, he pulls back and tries again. Such a pathetic bottom he is, tears and snot running down his face.

Suddenly Dom's cock moves away and Dom is covering his face with kisses. "You look so fucking hot when you cry," he whispers. "I want tie you up, fuck you, flay the skin right off you." Orlando can feel the promise of pain on his body, and it makes him gasp.

Dom's hand goes down between them. He undoes Orlando's trousers, and pulls his cock out to touch his own, which is wet with spit. It feels too good, Orlando's going to come now like a teenager. He whines into Dom's mouth, struggles a little against Dom's arm, which is like an iron bar holding him. Dom whispers, "It's good, it's fine, just let go for me Orli, there'll be more, yeah."

It dawns on Orlando that he doesn't have to hold himself back, that Dom wants him to let go. If Dom keeps touching like that, he'll come no matter what. And there will be more. Maybe not soon, (sod that location shooting), but more Dom. More Dom's amazing hand holding their cocks like that, and sliding them together. More of Dom's body against his, more Dom's mouth on him, more Dom pushing him down, hurting him... fucking him...

The touch and the thought together push Orlando over; he comes before he even knows it. It feels perfect, just shuddering and spurting come over Dom's hand, and making ecstatic moans that would be embarrassing if he had any pride left. His mouth starts working again, and he hears himself whispering Dom's name over and over like a Maori chant.

Dom's voice twines with his, he can feel Dom's chest rumble with it, with things like, "oh god" and "so fucking good Orli," and he's not stopping. In fact, Dom's getting faster, his hand pumping hard on his own cock, his other arm pushing Orlando's shoulders, keeping him pinned and safe. He dips down to kiss Orlando again, demanding everything, taking it. He wishes he could do more than open for for the kiss and press against Dom's groin. But it's all right, Dom's flushing, head back, panting. Orlando's glad he's already come so he can watch every movement of Dom's face.

Dom's losing control right on top of him and it's the fucking best thing Orlando's ever seen. Dom's not talking any more, he's just moaning. When Dom comes, he arches back, every tendon in his body straining. He gives a funny little sigh, and paints Orlando's chest with his come, and it feels like... it feels amazingly good. His mouth must have been open because he tastes Dom's salty-sour-perfect come. Now when he says Dom's name, it's more like a croon or something, and he gets a little flavor of Dom every time he says the "m", licking out for more.

Dom's resting on him, trembling. Orlando loves the feeling, the weight, the sweat and come sticking them together, the smell of Dom, which is excitement and sex in a different way now. It's only when Dom undoes the leather bracelets and strokes his wrists that he remembers he even has arms.

Orlando finds he can hold Dom -- it's more like clutching -- in a way he's never held anyone before. Not just Dom. Anyone.

"Orli?" Dom's speaking softly in his ear, "Are you all right?"

"Fuck yeah," he's never been righter.

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Comments {27}

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from: lalejandra
date: May. 31st, 2004 07:24 pm (UTC)
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Dom's jeans are open and his cock comes out and thrusts into his mouth. Orlando's sucking as deep as he can, but he's no fucking good at this. Dom pulls his hair and grates out, "Just fucking take it, Orli."

*dies*

First thought: Of course Orli wouldn't be good at giving head. He's far too pretty.

Heh.

V lovely, v hot!

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: May. 31st, 2004 09:33 pm (UTC)
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I don't write perfect blowjobs, but this is more imperfect than most. Poor Orlando.

I'm thrilled that you liked it.

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: May. 31st, 2004 09:34 pm (UTC)
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Thanks, fixed!

I hope your life clears up. I'm going to be in SC next weekend, maybe meet up?

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Brilliant...but not Gifted

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from: iolanthe_rosa
date: May. 31st, 2004 08:50 pm (UTC)
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It feels perfect, just shuddering and spurting come over Dom's hand, and making ecstatic moans that would be embarrassing if he had any pride left. His mouth starts working again, and he hears himself whispering Dom's name over and over like a Maori chant.

I love that, how you tie in the New Zealand imagery with the hot sex. This was the first non-domlijah I've read in ages, and it was great!

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: May. 31st, 2004 09:36 pm (UTC)
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Wow, I'm really flattered that you tried a non-OTP fic and and so happy that you liked it.

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novanumbernine

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from: novanumbernine
date: May. 31st, 2004 11:20 pm (UTC)
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!! always good to see a fic from you, and this is no exception...

n.x :)

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: Jun. 17th, 2004 11:38 pm (UTC)
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praise from you makes me warm all over. thanks.

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Cruel to be Kind, etc...

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from: shaenie
date: May. 31st, 2004 11:37 pm (UTC)
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This bit:

his other arm pushing Orlando's shoulders, keeping him pinned and safe.

Pinned and safe. Very important qualifier on the pinned, crucial even, darling dear.

Excellent!

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: Jun. 1st, 2004 01:07 pm (UTC)
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Thank you so much. It means the world coming from you.

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JDH

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from: domhobbitzes
date: Jun. 1st, 2004 08:05 am (UTC)
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this is the first thing I have read in over two months. and it is wonderful.

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: Jun. 1st, 2004 09:34 am (UTC)
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Wow, I'm incredibly flattered. There have been some fabulous fics in the last two months though! *makes note to update recs*

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JDH

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from: domhobbitzes
date: Jun. 1st, 2004 11:11 am (UTC)
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yeah... and I don't really plan on reading anything for a possibly long time.

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Jaime Leigh Turney

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from: reibebe_dj
date: Jun. 1st, 2004 11:31 am (UTC)
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oh my favorite pairing!

thank you!it was utterly hot. i see orli as more of a top i admit but still done well! :D

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: Jun. 1st, 2004 01:08 pm (UTC)
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I tend to go against the current. I think Dom would be very interesting as a top, and am surprised how rare it is.

I'm glad you liked it.

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Blythe

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from: blythely
date: Jun. 1st, 2004 12:34 pm (UTC)
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niiiiiiiiiiice. you know i like pushiness that doesn't become silly dominance. and this has that.

i like it, because it's imperfect sex, and mismatched and mistimed, and how most people discover the pleasures of restraint and restraining.

again. niiiiiiice. love it.

<3

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: Jun. 1st, 2004 01:16 pm (UTC)
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But of course, I don't write perfect sex, it's been done to death. I'm so glad that it works for you. <3

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AndreaLyn

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from: andrealyn
date: Jul. 24th, 2004 08:25 pm (UTC)
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Oh man, that's just...that's just HOT. Guh. Just, guh.

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from: anonymous
date: Aug. 19th, 2005 02:19 am (UTC)
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Hi, I'm usually not a fan of Dom-Orli, but this was good. Loved the power dynamic, wouldn't mind having a sexy, turned on Dom sitting in my lap.

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: Aug. 19th, 2005 02:28 am (UTC)
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Thank you for reading outside of your usual pairing, and especially for commenting. I'm delighted that you like it.

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<3.14

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from: apple_pi
date: Dec. 31st, 2005 08:15 am (UTC)
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Um... guh? Whew. Zoni is taunting me with Dom/Orli links, if you're wondering what the heck I'm doing here.

This was quite quite hot. *fans self*

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Feel For Faith

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from: feelforfaith
date: May. 23rd, 2007 03:20 pm (UTC)
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Thank you so much for linking me to this!

Dom's losing control right on top of him and it's the fucking best thing Orlando's ever seen.

I loved it. I'm so used to seeing Dom on the bottom with Billy and I like him there, heh, but like I said, Dom/Orlando, with Dom on top, is just... yeah. *g*.

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: May. 24th, 2007 04:41 am (UTC)
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Thank you, I am very pleased with this one, it came out in words the way it felt in my head, which is really special.

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Slash

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from: slashorama
date: Aug. 25th, 2008 11:32 pm (UTC)
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Simply delicious! :D

I love the fact that Dom loses control like that. So many BDSM fics make the dominant partner almost machine like in their self control. This was a welcome change to that and an incredibly beautiful image as well.

Edited at 2008-08-26 01:27 am (UTC)

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: Aug. 29th, 2008 01:51 am (UTC)
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I'm rally glad you like this, I am very fond of this story, as it came out on the (virtual) page pretty much the way I felt it in my head.

I agree that lots of BDSM is too smooth, and I've always had a thing for imperfect sex, so I'm glad this worked for you.

If you like this kind of thing, I'm co-writing a non-linear BDSM relationship saga at mostly Billy/Dom, with some het, and hope you might like to read it.

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stormatdusk

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from: stormatdusk
date: Aug. 28th, 2008 06:50 am (UTC)
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But Dom is quicker and less conflicted

this begs for more; you know that, right?

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Lotripper

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from: msilverstar
date: Aug. 29th, 2008 02:15 am (UTC)
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Well, now there's the remix, there might be a bit more in me.

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